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So many people spend their health gaining wealth, and then have
to spend their wealth to regain their health." What do you think of this quote?
I absolutely agree about that quote. And it is remind to us about our society. These days, we are very busy to working to earn the money.
Correction: I absolutely agree about the quote because it reminds us the importance of our health. These days we are very busy with our jobs to earn money.
Therfore we don;t have any free time. That makes us feel exhusted and our healt is more getting weker if we didn't any oter excercise. Finally, we spend our wealh, money or capital, to recovery or recharge our energy. This bad cycle is presencing unless captitalism is disapearing.
Correction: We don’t have free time anymore. We feel exhausted, we don’t exercise and we become unhealthy. Finally, we spend our wealth to regain health again. This lifestyle is really bad unless capitalism will disappear.
To protect it, we need to try ourseleves. First, strong eagering of wealth is not good to mental health, so it is dealt with more easlily than realistic. Second, we take care of our health in advance before causing a illness. For example, we reguraly take a excercise or having lots water. To be honestly, the most correcct answer is hangs upon in my mind.
Correction: We should change our lifestyle as well as our priority in life to avoid any health risk. If we only focus on wealth our health is at risk. We should take care of our health to avoid any illness because ‘prevention is better than cure’. We have to exercise regularly and drink plenty of water. Honestly, we should relax and have a peace of mind. ‘Health is wealth’.
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| 2012-10-16 |
| 오후 12:27:06 |
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| 박관영 |
다음에는 홈페이지에서 마이페이지를 클릭하면 왼쪽에 영어첨삭이라고 있어요. 영어첨삭을 클릭해서 글쓰기에 쓰시면 강사와 연결됩니다.^-^ |
| 2012-10-16 |
| 오후 12:30:23 |
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